You did not butcher Henry. At all. (...Not that you really could since I know nothing about him, but still. You didn't!)
This whole this is fantastic and I actually really like the jumpiness to it. Although I'm hesitant to actually call it jumpy, because it's all pretty cohesive and not at all twitchy feeling to me. You did good, little lady!
The bit where Penelope ate the pomegranate seeds was especially lovely. Full of nice, juicy descriptions. Makes me want some, even if it would consign me to Hades. Although with a hunk like Henry as a husband that doesn't seem like such a bad gig.
Danessa seems like a total stick in the mud. I dislike her already.
Now write more about Penelope's crush on Henry! Do it do it do iiiiit! I demand it of you!
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You did not butcher Henry. At all. (...Not that you really could since I know nothing about him, but still. You didn't!)
This whole this is fantastic and I actually really like the jumpiness to it. Although I'm hesitant to actually call it jumpy, because it's all pretty cohesive and not at all twitchy feeling to me. You did good, little lady!
The bit where Penelope ate the pomegranate seeds was especially lovely. Full of nice, juicy descriptions. Makes me want some, even if it would consign me to Hades. Although with a hunk like Henry as a husband that doesn't seem like such a bad gig.
Danessa seems like a total stick in the mud. I dislike her already.
Now write more about Penelope's crush on Henry! Do it do it do iiiiit! I demand it of you!